New Yorkers love to have a coffee. It's a very busy city so they tend to buy "to go" coffee and walk the city with their phone on the other hand. It makes them look "busier". Starbucks used to be loved by everyone but I think that is slowly changing. You can see more and more independent coffee shop with a nice interior inside. Do you have a favorite coffee shop? I like this place named "Intelligentsia" which is located in Broadway and 36th street. It has welcoming vibe and cool atmosphere. As soon as you get in to the shop, you can smell the coffee bean which will open your eyes and give you a pleasant morning. Staffs are nice, friendly and very efficient as well. I really like this place and I have been going to their shop since I found it. Before you take the first taste, try to take a big breath inhale. You can experience the smell of coffee goes to your brain and it'll give you the best morning. It might cost you more than a dollar coffee but it's totally worth it.
Good job, George. Your writing style is very informal, but that's OK here. You have a natural sense of English which makes your life a little easier, but you have to fine tune your langague - especially with regard to your use and understanding of prepositions and count v. non-count nouns. 1 - coffee is uncountable so it is incorrect to use the article "a" before coffee. You may hear this from time to time but not form native English speakers. 2. Things are "in" your hand unless it's a bug, dirt or a tattoo, generally. Dirt can be "on" your hand. 3. When you see things in general (like coffee shops) you need to use a plural form. 4. Stores are located "on" streets, not "in" them. Manhole covers are in streets, not much else. 5. I don't think one coffee bean has much smell and anyway, you need several of them to make a single cup of espresso. Use the plural. 6. The word "staff" is a collective noun. It is always a reference to a group and like the world "group" it takes a singular 3rd person verb. It also shouldn't have an S ending unless you are referring to multiple staffs of multiple companies. So, the staff IS nice. 7. If you take a "big breath" you are inhaling, so you don't need to say both. 8. If you "can experience" something then you only need to say what you can experience. Be careful here. Experience is a verb in your sentence, not a noun. If it's a noun only, as in, "the experience goes to your head" or "the experience can go to your head" then you need to add the verb after. Actually, I think you should forego the word "experience" altogether and simply say, "The smell of their coffee can go directly to your brain and give you the best morning ever."
Dr,Cafe. Everyone has his/her own favorite coffee house as a third places. A nice place to drink coffee, spend time with someone or just do some work. Dr.Cafe is my favorite coffee house. Dr. Cafe is a big coffee house located in Khurais Road, Exit 10 Saudi Arabia. It has a bright colors. I like the existence of many rooms, so you can be separated from others in a quiet zone. Each room has its own furniture. You can choose the one that you are comfortable with. Some days I go early morning to have my breakfast there. And some days I go if I am overwhelmed with things in my mind. I never ordered from the menu I like making my own order. My favorite coffee is half Moca and half hot chocolate. I call it Mocochocolate. A lot of memories were there. Meeting my husband for the first time. Meeting my best friends all the weekends there. I like Dr.Cafe for the feeling it gives to me.
Your writing is getting better every time. This is good, but please consider the notes that follow.
1 - you cannot use "a" with plural nouns. 2 - your second sentence is incomplete. There is no subject or verb, but merely a list of qualities about the subject (It, for example). 3 - If you see George's notes, he also used "in" for store locations. What should it be? 4 - Again, "a" can't be used with plurals. 5 - You go "early in THE morning" to do something. 6 - Things are not in your mind. They are "on" it. 7 - You missed the period after "menu". 8 - Memories were not there. Memories were made there. Memories cannot exist on their own, so you need to use the verb to indicate that they were created. 9 - Those two sentences that being with "Meeting" are missing the predicates....there needs to say what happened there OR you can just precede them with a colon after "there" and using lower case letters for the Ms and a comma between them.
In Ferrara, my city in Italy, there are a lot of coffee shops, but only some of them are for teenagers. In winter I prefer "Itit" because it is nice and warm and it is considered the Italian Starbucks. In this coffee shop there are a few tables and comfortable armchairs only in the inside because the majority of summer it is closed. Near the counter there are the the hot desserts and people can order hot drinks like hot chocolate or coffee. My favourite desserts are blueberry muffins and I usually do not take anything to drink because I hate coffee. Last time I went there, it was December after going ice skating and I bought my usual muffin. Then I sat with my friend Giulia who had bought a hot chocolate and we met some friends. This was not exactly the last time I went there because before coming to New York I wanted to go there one last time but, as I sad before, it is closed the majority of summer so I discovered a new coffee shop called "La Romana". Now I prefer "La Romana" in summer because they sell ice creams, crepes, cold drinks and other delicious things. Emma Cia
Good job, Emma. You have a nice style that is easy to read, but you should pay attention to these errors:
1 - The tables and chairs are "on" the inside. Everything is on the inside. To say it's IN the INside would be redundant, in a way. 2 - The "hot desserts" you refer to are not known to the reader, so you shouldn't use a definite article there, plus you doubled it! Don't use either "the". 3 - This is not so important for you, perhaps, but in American English we don't use the U in words ending with "our" forms, generally. Thus - "favorite". 4 - Blueberry muffins are 1 type of dessert, so no plural there. 5 - You don't "take" things to drink. You "have" food and drinks. Sometimes people say they "take" sugar or milk in their coffee and you "take" medicine. 6 - You misspelled "said" in "as I sad before". 7 - "Ice cream" is uncountable in the way you want to use it here. It's a milk-based (liquid) product so almost always uncountable.
Ramini Cafe that located on between 7th and 8th Avenue at its intersection with 37 street is my favorite place in New York and that because of two main reasons The first reason is Ramini Cafe has the best coffee in New York in my opinion of course. Since I am so picky when it comes to coffee. I like to taste the milk inside the coffee in the same time I like it strong which I only find that in this cafe. Also, I do not have to add sugar or anything because it test perfect. Add to that the owner of the cafe is Arabic so this coffee reminds me where I came from even it is a black coffee and it is not a tradition Arabic coffee however still you I can feel the Arabic flavor in it. I won't forgot to mention the different type of healthy cakes the cafe has. They are great and healthy so I do not feel bad when I have them.
The second reason is the atmosphere of the cafe. It is warm and nice. It it white and has 8 old chairs that designed in a modern way. It has old mirror that add more since of beauty and there is an old long chair like the one you see in park and it is my favorite chair. The cafe has free WIFI which make a better place to hang out there with your computer or your smartphone working, studying, browsing, or even just watching your favorite TV show.
The cafe is near to my school so I hang out there in my break time. The servers there are super nice and friendly and the give free cakes sometimes or free drinks. It is just a beautiful place.
As always, you get your point across well, but be mindful of these points:
1 - You forgot to use the "be" in your first passive form (the cafe "is located" on ...) 2 - the phrase after Ramini Cafe should be surrounded by commas because it's a non-essential relative clause. Also these types of clauses may not begin with "that" but which or who. In this case, which. 3 - "...that because of..." should be, "...this is because of.." or simply "for two reasons". 4 - the "of course" at the end of the second sentence is superfluous, so take it away. 5 - "Since I am so picky when it comes to coffee." is not a sentence. There is no explanation as to what the result of this being picky is. This info must be in the same sentence. 6 - ".., AT the same time..." 7 - You misspelled "tastes". 8 - The sentence that beings with "Add to that..." is a run-on sentence. This needs to be cut up. 9 - throughout the rest there are missing plurals and verb forms are incorrect, so take a look and try to fix it!
Think Coffee. Its ambiance and atmosphere is perfect to read, work or hang out. Their coffees are deliciously and creatively made, they have a good variety of pastries and their employees have a cool, chill style, which makes perfect sense for the entire place.
There are several Think Coffee shops all around NYC. The first one that i went to, is in the East Village near NYU, actually for a meeting, we ordered each a frothy coffee and the quiet and coffee-smelling place made it a wonderful first experience.
If you come to NYC, don't even "Think" about not going to this coffee shop.
As always, you have a good natural writing ability, but you have to be mindful of your verb usage.
1 - Ambiance AND atmosphere are two things, right? So, "is" can't be right then, right? 2 - I don't think anything makes sense for the place. The place doesn't have a mind. The logic of that phrase needs to be considered. 3 - The comma after "went to," makes no sense here. 4 - "Actually..." needs to start a new sentence and the entire wording after needs to be changed. It's a little too conversational and doesn't make sense when written. If you were speaking it would be easy to understand the flow, but written words have to be more precise. Much more precise. 5 - "Coffee-smelling" could be understood to be a place where you go to smell coffee as if it were a function of the locale. I don't think you want that confusion. It'd be better to describe it as simply the "aroma of the coffee" that made it a great place to spend that time.
My favorite coffee house is called La Tartine. This is french cafe-bakery placed in a really nice district of my hometown. It has officially opened in 2005 and still keeps its original taste and inimitable quality. The ambiance is really welcoming and cozy. On the entrance there is a fireplace, the design is inspired by "Alice in Wonderland". Beautiful trees, black&white floor, charming decorations, comfy sofas are calling to seat and relax. The bakery is delicious what makes you want some more. The prices are quite comfortable, but for patisserie they are not. For instance, 1 big coffee costs $5 and chocolate muffin costs the same. I also love this place because of its good music and friendly service.
You did a good job of writing like you speak; however, we must work on improving both. The written word has to be perfect, unlike speech Here are some notes about this paragraph:
1. The bakery is a single place and you describe it using an article before the adjective "French", which requires a capital letter. 2. The bakery is not "placed" in a nice district but "located". 3 In the second sentence, using the present perfect for the verb "open" as you do here makes no sense because that was a single action that happened one time in the past. It does open every day and it has opened today, but that is not what you mean by open here. 4. The fireplace is not ON the entrance. If it were, you wouldn't be able to enter or it would be dangerous to enter. I think it's "near". 5. Black and white (not a closed compound). 6. Seat needs to be in the verb form. 7. I don't think the bakery is delicious unless you are Godzilla. Did you eat the bakery? Also, using "what" as a relative pronoun is not correct here. Try re-working this whole sentence because it is not logical. 8. Patisserie is not an English word. I could be OK here but I'd prefer that you avoid French words if we have an English equivalent. This word, in any case, needs an article. The same is true for the chocolate muffin.
Basically I do not really prefer coffee houses or cafes. Instead of them I like going to bars and pubs usually. However, occasionally I spend my time in any kind of cafes or similar places. I live in a small town where there are few cafes. Most of them are not too significant for me because these are very small, not spacious, generally only few local people visit them. Yet, there is a really good, friendly and pleasant cafe in my settlement, actually in the center of town. It is called Cafe Master. This space is located near our family"s house so more or less I choose it if I would like to drink a coffee, tea or eat a kind of cake with my local friends. Cafe Master is spacious and airy. It has two parts: an inside and an outside part. Inside there are lots of tables with wooden chairs. On the wall different kinds of paintings hang which related to Hungarian culture. On the ceiling there is a beautiful chandelier. Outside there are cosy sofas which give opportunity to you to spend your time well while you are eating or drinking. Beside coffee you can buy some snacks, pizzas, ice creams and cakes here. This cafe might be an excellent place where you can organize a romantic date because it is quiet, peaceable and it has very pleasant ambiance. Approximately three months ago I was there last time with my girlfriend and I have nice memories about this occasion. In general I visit other cafes for free WiFi. For instance Starbucks is totally good place for this aim. I buy a small coffee and while I am drinking it I am using the Internet. I know, it is not too interesting activity, but sometimes it is necessary in this modern world.
Good job, Adam; however, you need to work on using more natural vocabulary. Sometimes you choose words that have a good and correct meaning, but they are simply not the appropriate word.
1 - Prefer is not the word to use here. You simple need to say "like" or "enjoy spending time in". 2 - In the second sentence, "usuallly" belongs just before the main verb, "like". 3 - You need the conjunction "and" before the last item list in the last sentence of the second paragraph, You also need to put an article before "few" in that last phrase. 4 - I don't think you live in a settlement, exactly. This word is really only used for communities that are new and mostly occupied by former nomads or refugees. Stick with words like "community" or "area". 5 - We generally don't say "a coffee". You can, but it sounds strange. We mostly drink uncountable things, though we do drink them in glasses or cups, so "a cup of coffee" is correct, or simply, "coffee". 6 - There is an auxiliary missing form the passive verb "related" in the 4th paragraph. 7 - In American English, cozy is spelled with a Z. 8 - Peaceable is the wrong form of the adjective to use here. It's really only used for people or ways of behavior. You want to say "peaceful". 9 - Ambiance is countable and this place has only one. 10 - Starbucks is A good place for this. 11 - One of the last phrases has an awkward form. You should say, "It's not a very interesting activity, but.."
(Pilar) Sorry for the delay, I really wanted to post it: There are many coffee shops in Madrid, an old city where you can find nice and traditional establishments that can make you feel home but no one with the atmosphere that Lolinas offer. Lolinas is a small and cosy vintage cafe placed in the trendy area of Malasaña. The first time I went there I was looking for a nice and warm place where I can work with my laptop and a friend of mine recommended this particular coffee shop. There are many reasons to love Lolinas, like the fact that the chairs, the tables all their furniture and decoration does not match each other, instead of it, every piece is unique, and that imprints a funny, sloppy, cosy and inspiring atmosphere. You can find there young couples, writers, musicians and students from all over the world. Every time I go back to Madrid I try to visit Lolinas, and the last time I went there I ordered their famous Cheescake, and also a Mojito, because they don't only serve coffee they have as well good cocktail bar that can turn a peaceful evening in Madrid into a improvised cocktail party with your friends. So it seems that Lolinas is one of a kind coffee shop, that makes the difference in the diversity of establishments that Madrid offers. Pilar
1 - The first sentence is too long and you created a clause to define Madrid and then you went on to write about a coffee shop in Madrid. There is too much going on. Break this sentence into two. Stop at Establishments, elminate "that" and change it to a defining phrase like "These places (establishments) can...". 2 - the verb at the end of the sentence refers to a 3rd person, so... 3 - The first time you went to this cafe you "could" do things. 4 - You make a list of things and they you said they "does not match". 5 - This same sentence is another example of one that goes on and on and on. This is an extreme run-on sentence. Break it up. 6 - the next sentence is the same. It's a run-on sentence. One or two ideas at most per sentence, please. 7 - The cafe is a "a one-of-a-kind" place.
At first view Bushwick is not a neighborhood where you can find cool places, but after 2 months living here we started to discover some nice coffee houses and bars.
One of my favorite places it’s Little Skips, a small coffee houses on Myrtle avenue. The coffee there it’s really good, but what I like the most of Little Skyps it’s the ambience. The atmosphere it’s friendly and chill, the music it’s really good and the walls are covered with wonderful art. They also have a long sandwich menu, a bunch of different salads and the most important thing it’s that they make gazpacho (of course is not as good as the Spanish one but it’s good enough).
We discovered this place just a month ago, but it has become one of my favorite places in New York and almost a tradition to go there and take a latte after the “siesta” time.
Very good job, Berta. Just be mindful of logic, redundancy and form.
1 - Buswick "doesn't seem like a..." place like this. You can't just use "be" in this case because it's about one's impression and not the reality of it's being. 2 - Word order issue: "...living here for two months we..." 3 - The "it's" in the first sentence of the second paragraph is redundant. I know you're talking bout your "favorite place", so not "it's" but just "is". 4 - You like things "about" places, not "of" them. 5 - Is it "Skips" or "Skyps"? 6 - Again, the atmosphere is obvious, so.... Same issue with the music. 7 - Menus can be long when they are shaped that way. You want to say "big" or "comprehensive". 8 - The gazpacho part should be a new sentence. Here you need to use "it" when you refer to the Gazpacho because it's in a parenthetical. You can also use "this is". 9 - You don't "take" coffee or any drink; you "have" or "drink" them.
This week, my students will write an essay about their favorite coffee house and its functionality as a "third place".
New Yorkers love to have a coffee.
ReplyDeleteIt's a very busy city so they tend to buy "to go" coffee and walk the city with their phone on the other hand.
It makes them look "busier".
Starbucks used to be loved by everyone but I think that is slowly changing.
You can see more and more independent coffee shop with a nice interior inside.
Do you have a favorite coffee shop?
I like this place named "Intelligentsia" which is located in Broadway and 36th street.
It has welcoming vibe and cool atmosphere.
As soon as you get in to the shop, you can smell the coffee bean which will open your eyes and give you a pleasant morning.
Staffs are nice, friendly and very efficient as well.
I really like this place and I have been going to their shop since I found it.
Before you take the first taste, try to take a big breath inhale.
You can experience the smell of coffee goes to your brain and it'll give you the best morning.
It might cost you more than a dollar coffee but it's totally worth it.
George Inaki
NOTES:
DeleteGood job, George. Your writing style is very informal, but that's OK here. You have a natural sense of English which makes your life a little easier, but you have to fine tune your langague - especially with regard to your use and understanding of prepositions and count v. non-count nouns.
1 - coffee is uncountable so it is incorrect to use the article "a" before coffee. You may hear this from time to time but not form native English speakers.
2. Things are "in" your hand unless it's a bug, dirt or a tattoo, generally. Dirt can be "on" your hand.
3. When you see things in general (like coffee shops) you need to use a plural form.
4. Stores are located "on" streets, not "in" them. Manhole covers are in streets, not much else.
5. I don't think one coffee bean has much smell and anyway, you need several of them to make a single cup of espresso. Use the plural.
6. The word "staff" is a collective noun. It is always a reference to a group and like the world "group" it takes a singular 3rd person verb. It also shouldn't have an S ending unless you are referring to multiple staffs of multiple companies. So, the staff IS nice.
7. If you take a "big breath" you are inhaling, so you don't need to say both.
8. If you "can experience" something then you only need to say what you can experience. Be careful here. Experience is a verb in your sentence, not a noun. If it's a noun only, as in, "the experience goes to your head" or "the experience can go to your head" then you need to add the verb after. Actually, I think you should forego the word "experience" altogether and simply say, "The smell of their coffee can go directly to your brain and give you the best morning ever."
Dr,Cafe.
ReplyDeleteEveryone has his/her own favorite coffee house as a third places. A nice place to drink coffee, spend time with someone or just do some work. Dr.Cafe is my favorite coffee house.
Dr. Cafe is a big coffee house located in Khurais Road, Exit 10 Saudi Arabia. It has a bright colors. I like the existence of many rooms, so you can be separated from others in a quiet zone. Each room has its own furniture. You can choose the one that you are comfortable with.
Some days I go early morning to have my breakfast there. And some days I go if I am overwhelmed with things in my mind.
I never ordered from the menu I like making my own order. My favorite coffee is half Moca and half hot chocolate. I call it Mocochocolate.
A lot of memories were there. Meeting my husband for the first time. Meeting my best friends all the weekends there.
I like Dr.Cafe for the feeling it gives to me.
Amal Alanizi ^_*
Hey, Amal:
DeleteYour writing is getting better every time. This is good, but please consider the notes that follow.
1 - you cannot use "a" with plural nouns.
2 - your second sentence is incomplete. There is no subject or verb, but merely a list of qualities about the subject (It, for example).
3 - If you see George's notes, he also used "in" for store locations. What should it be?
4 - Again, "a" can't be used with plurals.
5 - You go "early in THE morning" to do something.
6 - Things are not in your mind. They are "on" it.
7 - You missed the period after "menu".
8 - Memories were not there. Memories were made there. Memories cannot exist on their own, so you need to use the verb to indicate that they were created.
9 - Those two sentences that being with "Meeting" are missing the predicates....there needs to say what happened there OR you can just precede them with a colon after "there" and using lower case letters for the Ms and a comma between them.
In Ferrara, my city in Italy, there are a lot of coffee shops, but only some of them are for teenagers. In winter I prefer "Itit" because it is nice and warm and it is considered the Italian Starbucks. In this coffee shop there are a few tables and comfortable armchairs only in the inside because the majority of summer it is closed. Near the counter there are the the hot desserts and people can order hot drinks like hot chocolate or coffee. My favourite desserts are blueberry muffins and I usually do not take anything to drink because I hate coffee. Last time I went there, it was December after going ice skating and I bought my usual muffin. Then I sat with my friend Giulia who had bought a hot chocolate and we met some friends. This was not exactly the last time I went there because before coming to New York I wanted to go there one last time but, as I sad before, it is closed the majority of summer so I discovered a new coffee shop called "La Romana". Now I prefer "La Romana" in summer because they sell ice creams, crepes, cold drinks and other delicious things.
ReplyDeleteEmma Cia
Good job, Emma. You have a nice style that is easy to read, but you should pay attention to these errors:
Delete1 - The tables and chairs are "on" the inside. Everything is on the inside. To say it's IN the INside would be redundant, in a way.
2 - The "hot desserts" you refer to are not known to the reader, so you shouldn't use a definite article there, plus you doubled it! Don't use either "the".
3 - This is not so important for you, perhaps, but in American English we don't use the U in words ending with "our" forms, generally. Thus - "favorite".
4 - Blueberry muffins are 1 type of dessert, so no plural there.
5 - You don't "take" things to drink. You "have" food and drinks.
Sometimes people say they "take" sugar or milk in their coffee and you "take" medicine.
6 - You misspelled "said" in "as I sad before".
7 - "Ice cream" is uncountable in the way you want to use it here. It's a milk-based (liquid) product so almost always uncountable.
Ramini Cafe that located on between 7th and 8th Avenue at its intersection with 37 street is my favorite place in New York and that because of two main reasons
ReplyDeleteThe first reason is Ramini Cafe has the best coffee in New York in my opinion of course. Since I am so picky when it comes to coffee. I like to taste the milk inside the coffee in the same time I like it strong which I only find that in this cafe. Also, I do not have to add sugar or anything because it test perfect. Add to that the owner of the cafe is Arabic so this coffee reminds me where I came from even it is a black coffee and it is not a tradition Arabic coffee however still you I can feel the Arabic flavor in it. I won't forgot to mention the different type of healthy cakes the cafe has. They are great and healthy so I do not feel bad when I have them.
The second reason is the atmosphere of the cafe. It is warm and nice. It it white and has 8 old chairs that designed in a modern way. It has old mirror that add more since of beauty and there is an old long chair like the one you see in park and it is my favorite chair. The cafe has free WIFI which make a better place to hang out there with your computer or your smartphone working, studying, browsing, or even just watching your favorite TV show.
The cafe is near to my school so I hang out there in my break time. The servers there are super nice and friendly and the give free cakes sometimes or free drinks. It is just a beautiful place.
Hey, Fahda:
DeleteAs always, you get your point across well, but be mindful of these points:
1 - You forgot to use the "be" in your first passive form (the cafe "is located" on ...)
2 - the phrase after Ramini Cafe should be surrounded by commas because it's a non-essential relative clause. Also these types of clauses may not begin with "that" but which or who. In this case, which.
3 - "...that because of..." should be, "...this is because of.." or simply "for two reasons".
4 - the "of course" at the end of the second sentence is superfluous, so take it away.
5 - "Since I am so picky when it comes to coffee." is not a sentence. There is no explanation as to what the result of this being picky is. This info must be in the same sentence.
6 - ".., AT the same time..."
7 - You misspelled "tastes".
8 - The sentence that beings with "Add to that..." is a run-on sentence. This needs to be cut up.
9 - throughout the rest there are missing plurals and verb forms are incorrect, so take a look and try to fix it!
Think Coffee. Its ambiance and atmosphere is perfect to read, work or hang out. Their coffees are deliciously and creatively made, they have a good variety of pastries and their employees have a cool, chill style, which makes perfect sense for the entire place.
ReplyDeleteThere are several Think Coffee shops all around NYC. The first one that i went to, is in the East Village near NYU, actually for a meeting, we ordered each a frothy coffee and the quiet and coffee-smelling place made it a wonderful first experience.
If you come to NYC, don't even "Think" about not going to this coffee shop.
Ornella Ch.
Hey, Ornella:
DeleteAs always, you have a good natural writing ability, but you have to be mindful of your verb usage.
1 - Ambiance AND atmosphere are two things, right? So, "is" can't be right then, right?
2 - I don't think anything makes sense for the place. The place doesn't have a mind. The logic of that phrase needs to be considered.
3 - The comma after "went to," makes no sense here.
4 - "Actually..." needs to start a new sentence and the entire wording after needs to be changed. It's a little too conversational and doesn't make sense when written. If you were speaking it would be easy to understand the flow, but written words have to be more precise. Much more precise.
5 - "Coffee-smelling" could be understood to be a place where you go to smell coffee as if it were a function of the locale. I don't think you want that confusion. It'd be better to describe it as simply the "aroma of the coffee" that made it a great place to spend that time.
My favorite coffee house is called La Tartine. This is french cafe-bakery placed in a really nice district of my hometown. It has officially opened in 2005 and still keeps its original taste and inimitable quality. The ambiance is really welcoming and cozy. On the entrance there is a fireplace, the design is inspired by "Alice in Wonderland". Beautiful trees, black&white floor, charming decorations, comfy sofas are calling to seat and relax. The bakery is delicious what makes you want some more. The prices are quite comfortable, but for patisserie they are not. For instance, 1 big coffee costs $5 and chocolate muffin costs the same. I also love this place because of its good music and friendly service.
ReplyDeleteKamilla
Hey, Kamilla:
DeleteYou did a good job of writing like you speak; however, we must work on improving both. The written word has to be perfect, unlike speech
Here are some notes about this paragraph:
1. The bakery is a single place and you describe it using an article before the adjective "French", which requires a capital letter.
2. The bakery is not "placed" in a nice district but "located".
3 In the second sentence, using the present perfect for the verb "open" as you do here makes no sense because that was a single action that happened one time in the past. It does open every day and it has opened today, but that is not what you mean by open here.
4. The fireplace is not ON the entrance. If it were, you wouldn't be able to enter or it would be dangerous to enter. I think it's "near".
5. Black and white (not a closed compound).
6. Seat needs to be in the verb form.
7. I don't think the bakery is delicious unless you are Godzilla. Did you eat the bakery? Also, using "what" as a relative pronoun is not correct here. Try re-working this whole sentence because it is not logical.
8. Patisserie is not an English word. I could be OK here but I'd prefer that you avoid French words if we have an English equivalent. This word, in any case, needs an article. The same is true for the chocolate muffin.
Basically I do not really prefer coffee houses or cafes. Instead of them I like going to bars and pubs usually. However, occasionally I spend my time in any kind of cafes or similar places.
ReplyDeleteI live in a small town where there are few cafes. Most of them are not too significant for me because these are very small, not spacious, generally only few local people visit them.
Yet, there is a really good, friendly and pleasant cafe in my settlement, actually in the center of town. It is called Cafe Master. This space is located near our family"s house so more or less I choose it if I would like to drink a coffee, tea or eat a kind of cake with my local friends.
Cafe Master is spacious and airy. It has two parts: an inside and an outside part. Inside there are lots of tables with wooden chairs. On the wall different kinds of paintings hang which related to Hungarian culture. On the ceiling there is a beautiful chandelier. Outside there are cosy sofas which give opportunity to you to spend your time well while you are eating or drinking.
Beside coffee you can buy some snacks, pizzas, ice creams and cakes here. This cafe might be an excellent place where you can organize a romantic date because it is quiet, peaceable and it has very pleasant ambiance.
Approximately three months ago I was there last time with my girlfriend and I have nice memories about this occasion.
In general I visit other cafes for free WiFi. For instance Starbucks is totally good place for this aim. I buy a small coffee and while I am drinking it I am using the Internet. I know, it is not too interesting activity, but sometimes it is necessary in this modern world.
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DeleteGood job, Adam; however, you need to work on using more natural vocabulary. Sometimes you choose words that have a good and correct meaning, but they are simply not the appropriate word.
Delete1 - Prefer is not the word to use here. You simple need to say "like" or "enjoy spending time in".
2 - In the second sentence, "usuallly" belongs just before the main verb, "like".
3 - You need the conjunction "and" before the last item list in the last sentence of the second paragraph, You also need to put an article before "few" in that last phrase.
4 - I don't think you live in a settlement, exactly. This word is really only used for communities that are new and mostly occupied by former nomads or refugees. Stick with words like "community" or "area".
5 - We generally don't say "a coffee". You can, but it sounds strange. We mostly drink uncountable things, though we do drink them in glasses or cups, so "a cup of coffee" is correct, or simply, "coffee".
6 - There is an auxiliary missing form the passive verb "related" in the 4th paragraph.
7 - In American English, cozy is spelled with a Z.
8 - Peaceable is the wrong form of the adjective to use here. It's really only used for people or ways of behavior. You want to say "peaceful".
9 - Ambiance is countable and this place has only one.
10 - Starbucks is A good place for this.
11 - One of the last phrases has an awkward form. You should say, "It's not a very interesting activity, but.."
(Pilar)
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There are many coffee shops in Madrid, an old city where you can find nice and traditional establishments that can make you feel home but no one with the atmosphere that Lolinas offer. Lolinas is a small and cosy vintage cafe placed in the trendy area of Malasaña. The first time I went there I was looking for a nice and warm place where I can work with my laptop and a friend of mine recommended this particular coffee shop. There are many reasons to love Lolinas, like the fact that the chairs, the tables all their furniture and decoration does not match each other, instead of it, every piece is unique, and that imprints a funny, sloppy, cosy and inspiring atmosphere. You can find there young couples, writers, musicians and students from all over the world. Every time I go back to Madrid I try to visit Lolinas, and the last time I went there I ordered their famous Cheescake, and also a Mojito, because they don't only serve coffee they have as well good cocktail bar that can turn a peaceful evening in Madrid into a improvised cocktail party with your friends. So it seems that Lolinas is one of a kind coffee shop, that makes the difference in the diversity of establishments that Madrid offers.
Pilar
Nice job, Pilar, but keep these points in mind:
Delete1 - The first sentence is too long and you created a clause to define Madrid and then you went on to write about a coffee shop in Madrid. There is too much going on. Break this sentence into two. Stop at Establishments, elminate "that" and change it to a defining phrase like "These places (establishments) can...".
2 - the verb at the end of the sentence refers to a 3rd person, so...
3 - The first time you went to this cafe you "could" do things.
4 - You make a list of things and they you said they "does not match".
5 - This same sentence is another example of one that goes on and on and on. This is an extreme run-on sentence. Break it up.
6 - the next sentence is the same. It's a run-on sentence. One or two ideas at most per sentence, please.
7 - The cafe is a "a one-of-a-kind" place.
At first view Bushwick is not a neighborhood where you can find cool places, but after 2 months living here we started to discover some nice coffee houses and bars.
ReplyDeleteOne of my favorite places it’s Little Skips, a small coffee houses on Myrtle avenue. The coffee there it’s really good, but what I like the most of Little Skyps it’s the ambience. The atmosphere it’s friendly and chill, the music it’s really good and the walls are covered with wonderful art. They also have a long sandwich menu, a bunch of different salads and the most important thing it’s that they make gazpacho (of course is not as good as the Spanish one but it’s good enough).
We discovered this place just a month ago, but it has become one of my favorite places in New York and almost a tradition to go there and take a latte after the “siesta” time.
Berta Gonzalez Embun
Very good job, Berta. Just be mindful of logic, redundancy and form.
Delete1 - Buswick "doesn't seem like a..." place like this. You can't just use "be" in this case because it's about one's impression and not the reality of it's being.
2 - Word order issue: "...living here for two months we..."
3 - The "it's" in the first sentence of the second paragraph is redundant. I know you're talking bout your "favorite place", so not "it's" but just "is".
4 - You like things "about" places, not "of" them.
5 - Is it "Skips" or "Skyps"?
6 - Again, the atmosphere is obvious, so.... Same issue with the music.
7 - Menus can be long when they are shaped that way. You want to say "big" or "comprehensive".
8 - The gazpacho part should be a new sentence. Here you need to use "it" when you refer to the Gazpacho because it's in a parenthetical. You can also use "this is".
9 - You don't "take" coffee or any drink; you "have" or "drink" them.
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