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Student Essays corrected.

WILL March 5, 2014 at 2:33 PM

In general, I think that women have make more complex purchase decisions than man men. But my point of view isn’t limited to the fact that women must obligatory feel obligated to buy items theirs they like.
In some cases money can be the big problem, and when you are broke, you can’t change your mind and decide to buy the items you want or you need. Maybe this is why some women prefer to buy a lot of chip cheap items, and have a large more choices.
In general I think men and women would buy everything they find attractive if they had extra money to spend. This is a general point of view and I would like to clarify that they are also people whose purchasing processes are not as the same as in this table.

Lucas FalciMarch 5, 2014 at 3:31 PM

I think that the differences between men and women are is huge, especially if you are talking about purchases,. in In most cases the decision making process of the a woman is slower and harder than it is for a the man.
For example, when a woman goes shopping, looking for clothes, she always tries ten different types, and in the end ends up buying the first one that she had tried on. It´s a waste of time.
Look at my mother,: She has a fifteen pairs of shoes and always wants to buy one more,  looks It seems like it´s never enough.

SEONG-YUN MINMarch 5, 2014 at 3:48 PM

Apparently it this photo is fair enough.
Women tend to decide to buy something after they went go to a shop, while men go to the a shop after decision deciding.
Because women like to go shopping even if that is only for window shopping.
So w Women think a lot during the while shopping, but men just buy what was already decided.

Tammy Liu March 5, 2014 at 3:49 PM

by Tammy Liu

I think a lot of times, women think of more reasons about for their choices than men do.
Such as For example, when i was shopping with my friend (male) in the supermarket on Monday, I wanted to choose a shampoo. then My friend went the area and picked one out for me, but it was random, Of course i didn't want it, I d love needed to see the brand of goods first, then i chosed the effect it had on my hair. at last Finally, I needed to know if it smelled good ,i only then would I buy it. Otherwise i would choose another one. I took 5 five minutes with that but my friend just used spent 1min one minute.
I think that is why people always say women take a lot of time on shopping

Alvaro AstorquiMarch 5, 2014 at 4:34 PM

Once I examined the picture I was able going to give my opinion.

I think in most of the cases, this picture say shows the truth true.

I think that mans men, in most of he cases, only buy things that they need and they can afford.

Women, when they buy, don't think as much as men. And in most of the cases buy things that maybe wouldn´t might not use.

Eugenia Toledo March 5, 2014 at 5:40 PM

I think that chart is a Little exaggerated, but try tries to say sometime something that is true. Women think about everything before buying something, because for most woman women, the clothes clothing is something that represents how they want to be seen by others them.

Instead On the other hand, men are more simple, and if they see something that they like them and is comfortable confortable, they just buy it. Obviously they think about if it is nice or not, but that is not so important.

This does not happen only with clothes, but is with everything. For example in marketing, commercials for women is are totally different than those for men. Commercials for women always have more things to show and they have is with more color. is a Little  Marketing directed at women is more complicated. However commercials for men are is simple, they do not like to see too many things, just that what they want.

krstine.lee1208March 5, 2014 at 6:41 PM

SANG KYUNG,LEE(Kristine)

-I think it depends on the person and situation. Generally, the girls think a lot of things more complex thoughts than guys. As you know, almost girls like shopping! —even just looking. They can enjoy walking in a shopping mall. However, the guys hate them malls if they don't need to go. They think just looking at some stuff , not buying, is a waste of time, boring and useless. 

I don't know why. I like to go shopping too, but I don't like just looking them at things because if I find a good stuff when I don't have enough money, I will feel miserable. but Despite this, my friends usually say to me “ let’s go shopping! Just window shopping. looking! You don't have to buy anything something!" I love my friends and I would like to hang out with them but I don't want to go a shopping mall to play.. 

Anyway, I’ve seen many couples fighting with each other when they went were shopping. the Often,  the man wanted wants to go home, and the woman wanted wants to stay more time. I think they should talk about how do to they figure that out. 

I know another funny opinion. the Men can't do one more than one actions in at the same time. For example, when the a man playsing a game, they he can't text or talk with someone. On the other hands, the women are pretty good at those things. they can make a call while watching TV tv or reading a book. I agree with this fact! My brother and boyfriend are always be like that, so sometimes I get really angry when they are playing games and they can't hear me!! but t However, this fact depends on the person too. We can't make be sure about people's personalityies, but I believe there are some instincts instinctual differences between women and men but you don't shouldn’t have to have particular prejudices. There are a lot of different types of people in the world, differences exist not just between men and women.

Reem AloudahMarch 5, 2014 at 6:54 PM I agree with this chart that women take a long time to decide for two reasons. First, women have to consider a lot of factors when they are going to buy clothes such as colors, brand’s names, etc. Women try to be more beautiful and stylish. The second reason is that they consider prices. They like to get beautiful things with lower prices. On the other hand, men are faster to take make a decision. For example, when I have an occasion, I need at least a week to be get ready while my husband decides in one day what he is going to wear.

AngutMarch 5, 2014 at 6:56 PM
Andrea Gutiérrez

I agree with the humorous "Decision Making Process". This is a fact that is scientifically proven. Men have a linear way of thinking and women’s minds are more random and complex one as a tree. Women can also do multiple tasks, while men can´t do it. These facts have a negative side too. Men are good at making practical decisions and remains in focus. Women live do life more complicated lives (life is already complex, it does not need to be complicated…) and spreads her attention all the time.
I also have daily experiences about that from my relationship with my husband. For example, before sending our children to school I think about what the weather is, when our homeworker housekeeper will come home for wash the clothes to do the laundry, which activities  the children have, etc. My husband only checks if they are dressed. This is not a good example but I´m tired and I´m thinking about take a shower, skype with family, make dinner….

Azumi Shimojo 

I agree with this table because I am a woman. From this table, I know the difference from in the mental process of men and women. I think that men is are simple. They decide only left or right. While, women have so much many selection criteria before till they decide to buy or not. So, I think that women is are more bother stressed than men.

When I go shopping, I always think whether an item is useful or not, an item is too expensive or not, an item suits me or not. While my brother doesn't go shopping if he doesn't want to or need anything.
So, I think these experiences suit make me agree with this table.

Hacer GümüşMarch 5, 2014 at 7:30 PM

Hacer Gumus

I think, every woman likes high quality handbags, shoes and clothes. Every woman even wants to have different colors and styles of handbags and shoes. If she saw the bag that she wanted the most, she could fail in love and buy it no matter what. For example, a women would could spend all her salary on an item of clothing. But this situation is different with for men. A man, in general, when he needs new clothes, he buys it them if he can afford it them. Sometimes, a woman could spend more money that is to die for. an absurd amount of money on something simple.
But a man considers if it is worth to buy. buying.
Eventually, Ultimately, men shop with using logic, while women shop with using their instincts.

Vdovtsova Maryna
Everybody knows that women are more emotional than man. Women's decisions depends on her mood. That is why all women can change their desicions decisions a few times a day. It happens all the time with me and I should say to be a woman is very defficul difficult. I have a lot of clothes that I have never worn and I don't know what was wrong with me when I bought all this stuff.

Of course, a lot of that depends on the individual’s personality, but usually making decision is very difficult for women.

Men are more decisive then than women. They have to be decisive and confident. 

이유경March 5, 2014 at 8:58 PM (NO NAME! - Yook-Young)

First of all, besides this mental process is not only applicable to men and women. I think it is differentiated by depends on a person’s character. This idea might be contradicted disparaged in that females tend to be more delicate and has have more interests in shopping. That is why the decision making in shopping done by a female is more complex than that of a male.
For give an example, from my experience i have seen my parents argue frequently while shopping. My dad thought generally thinks the more expensive the clothing the better while my mom usually wants wanted to look for a cheaper price somewhere else for the same product.
If you look at this problem the conclusion end result of wasting money is the same and if one has significant more interest in something it would not seem as to be a waste. I think these decisions can vary according to in the priorities and interests of people.

takahiro kasaiMarch 6, 2014 at 8:28 PM

takahiro kasai

I agree with this chart. When I have been benn shopping with my ex-girl friend I have often felt like this.
I feel, women always want to get something and they are never satisfied.
Women simpley simply cannot decide and are not sure of what they want.
If women have many choices it is hard for them to decide.
Women like to window shopping and waste of time and money.
Men make quick decisions when I gonna shopping, If I like it, I buy it.
If I don`t like it, I don`t buy it. Men shop faster than women.